What Makes the Thunder and Lightning
U Pyrthat cradled his great
drum in with the gentleness of a mother holding a child, the thick fingers of
his four arms blurring as they struck the instrument’s tightly stretched animal
skin. Although his hands seemed to strike the drum only lightly, the sound that
came out was deep and resonant. The booms
of the drum added an energizing baseline that supported the cheerful trills of
flutes and bombastic crash of cymbals. The thunder giant sat in the center of
the clearing that he had chosen as the location for the great festival he had organized,
his large form intimidating and yet majestic in the light of the full moon.
Around him were animals of every kind, every creature from the snail to the
squirrel to the tiger. They had all come to U Pythat’s party to eat, talk, and
dance.
The dancers were many, and all
of them whirled and flipped with vigor and grace to the steady beat of the
drums and the metallic clash of cymbals. The dancers all carried weapons of
some kind, lending a distinctly martial flavor to their dances. Moonlight
flashed across blurring iron as the dancers’ weapons were spun and thrown into the
air like batons before being caught again by deft paws. The spectacle of
cavorting beasts was one that any man would surely be astounded to witness,
although no men were there at the party, fur U Pyrthat had intended this
festival to be one reserved for the animals alone.
Although all of the dancers
were skilled, none could compare to the lynx U Kui when it came to elegance and
fluidity of movement. Neither could any of their weapons compare to the jeweled
sword that he had brought with him. The curved blade glowed with a constant and
dazzling illumination, as if having captured the light of the moon itself and
trapped it inside the steel. As U Kui twirled it rhythmically around his lithe frame, the sword seemed to
leave a trail of faint light in the wake of its movements that hung in the air
momentarily before slowly fading away. The effect was such that it seemed liked
the lynx was painting the very air around him in streaks of transient silver
light.
All of the animals at the party
were mesmerized by U Kui’s skill and the beauty of his sword. U Pyrthat’s amber
eyes gazed upon the lynx’s sword with abject envy. When there was a brief pause
in the music, the thunder giant walked over to the resting U Kui and pointed to
the lynx’s sword.
“U Kui, let me borrow that
sword for a while,” U Pythat said. “I wish to dance with it as well.”
U Kui’s sharp eyes narrowed as
they gazed up at the giant, his pointed ears folding down slightly. “This is my sword, U Pythat. I will not allow
another to dance with it.”
Other animals overheard the
lynx’s rude refusal and glared at him in anger.
“Do not be so selfish, U Kui!”
one of the animals remonstrated.
“U Pythat is our host!” another
animal said. “Were it not for him, you would not have been able to come here
and dance!”
U Kui found himself wilting
beneath the scowls of his fellow animals and their words of chastisement. With
a low grumble, the lynx reluctantly gave his sword to U Pythat. The giant
eagerly accepted the blade and walked back to the center of the clearing.
When the music started back up,
U Kui, still sore over being forced to lend his sword out, did not dance.
Instead he watched as U Pythat took up his drum again in one pair of hands
while holding the lynx’s sword in a third hand. When the music started up
again, the thunder giant managed the impressive task of simultaneously striking
his drum, twirling U Kui’s blade, and dancing. Now it was the thunder giant who
had everyone’s attention. His powerful legs pounded against the ground in
rhythm with his drumbeats, which now boomed so loudly that the ground itself
began to shake.
U Kui watched anxiously as U
Pythat pirouetted about with a grace that belied his great size. The thunder
giant slashed the lynx’s sword every which way, leaving streaks of light all
around his person. U Kui had to admit that U Pythat was even more adept than he
himself was at dancing. The prideful lynx growled a barely audible complaint
and wondered when the giant would stop dancing and give him back his sword.
Suddenly U Pythat leaped high
into the air even as he continued to whirl U Kui’s sword and beat his own drum.
U Kui shot back up to his paws and ran to the place where the giant had been dancing
just before, an angry roar tearing from his throat. He could do nothing but
watch helplessly as U Pythat disappeared into the purple clouds above. Although
none of the animals could see the giant’s body any longer, they could still
make out the bright streaks of light produced by U Kui’s sword flashing inside
the clouds. They could also still hear the loud booms of the thunder giant’s great drum.
This is how thunder and
lightning came into existence. This is also why U Kui never wanders far from
his home, for it is there where he is building a large mound that he hopes will
one day allow him to reach the sky, where he can reclaim the blade that was
stolen from him.
Author's Note: This story is basically a slightly more detailed version of the tale "What Makes the Lightning" from the Khasi folktales unit. The story as I've told it pretty much goes the exact same way as the original story. I was kind of pressed for time this Wednesday, so I couldn't think of any clever way to retell it. I basically just focused on telling the story in a way that focused on filling in some of the descriptive details that the original tale didn't give.
| U Kui looking kind of mad. Who can blame him? (Wikipedia Commons) Photo taken by Tony Hisgett (2013) |
Title: Folk-tales of the Khasis
Author: K.U. Rafy
Year Published: 1920
Source: Un-textbook
Well, for someone pressed for time you sure wrote a beautiful story! The details you added were mesmerizing, and I could vividly picture everything that was happening in the story! I do think your essay could use a little read over, just some edits for the flow and some comma placements, but overall I really enjoyed your story, and I have not read that unit yet but this makes me interested in looking into it!
ReplyDeleteAs promised, I've returned. This one is much more descriptive, and the danger of such stories is usually adjectives that get in the way of the writing. In this case, however, you struck a nice balance between colorful adjectives and concise writing. It seems that you have a good ability to match adjectives with verbs, which I think is key in good descriptive writing. Great writing, pressed for time or not!
ReplyDeletePressed for time and you still wrote a beautiful story. I really like the tone you've got here, and your descriptions are really nice too. I didn't get to read this unit but your story makes me want to - it's very well crafted and a really interesting tale of where thunder comes from. I think you handled it beautifully even if it's not as original as you would have liked.
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